What are you working on? II - Page 89

Talon · 07-06-2008, 09:26 AM

Yeah, steady on, dude.

It's evident that the quad bike he's making isn't a sports model, it's a big bulky military model.

Even if you're going to be brutal, you can at least give some sort of reasoning other than something that equates to "you suck, make it more cool".

bitmap · 07-06-2008, 03:33 PM

if its a military vehicle. searching for reference is important.
All Terrain Vehicle
one example on this site:

see how the wheels are covered by the plastic chassis? your model doesn't do that. its important because that way dirt wont go to your eyes.
second, of all the atvs i searched so far to post about them, all of them have the plastic chassis rounded, i.e. they dont have creases in the plastic like you seem to have.
other thing, to make something look cool, you first work on the big forms, and gradually work your way down. Add nice details to make it looks interesting.
I dont see headlights, i dont see a motor, maybe you do have them, but you post the render all in the same positioon. show it from other views, i wanna see from the bottom and behind.

chris89 · 07-06-2008, 04:27 PM

hmm, this is still the "what are you working on" thread. You're giving some good points, but some sentences sound a bit harsh to me.

ae. · 07-06-2008, 05:14 PM

bitmap thanks for theref man i appreciate the brutal honesty, i might throw this model out and start a new atv

bitmap · 07-06-2008, 05:16 PM

lol
this is the internet, its easy to start fights. but if i wanted to sound harsh i would just criticize without giving good points, when in fact i pointed out some stuff that in my opinion he should check out. but as i said, this is the internet, so take it with a grain of salt.

ae. · 07-06-2008, 05:20 PM

nah man that was a good crit i really thank you for it, i actually started a new atv i figured out my problem with the last one i used too many ref from sport and military atvs so it was a mash up and was hard to give a feel of it, im going to start a new one but its not going to be a military one its going to be a sports version.

ae. · 07-07-2008, 01:57 AM

heres an update still need to add the drive chain thingy to the back wheel also those wheels are temp so i could get a look at the size:

chris89 · 07-07-2008, 03:49 AM

well that's damned amazing all of a sudden haha, nice.

bitmap · 07-07-2008, 05:07 AM

now we're talking!

keep it up

ae. · 07-07-2008, 05:11 AM

hey can you guys help me fine a good pick of the chasis of an atv and engine i cant seem to find any good ref ill look harder.

07-06-2008, 09:26 AM	#881 (permalink)
Talon Game-Artist.net Staff 2,770 - 470	Yeah, steady on, dude. It's evident that the quad bike he's making isn't a sports model, it's a big bulky military model. Even if you're going to be brutal, you can at least give some sort of reasoning other than something that equates to "you suck, make it more cool". __________________ > My Portfolio > Hull-Breach Lead Modeler > Supporter of good crits.

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07-06-2008, 03:33 PM	#882 (permalink)
bitmap Freelancer 129 - 11	if its a military vehicle. searching for reference is important. All Terrain Vehicle one example on this site: see how the wheels are covered by the plastic chassis? your model doesn't do that. its important because that way dirt wont go to your eyes. second, of all the atvs i searched so far to post about them, all of them have the plastic chassis rounded, i.e. they dont have creases in the plastic like you seem to have. other thing, to make something look cool, you first work on the big forms, and gradually work your way down. Add nice details to make it looks interesting. I dont see headlights, i dont see a motor, maybe you do have them, but you post the render all in the same positioon. show it from other views, i wanna see from the bottom and behind.

07-06-2008, 05:14 PM	#884 (permalink)
ae. Level Artist 569 - 14	bitmap thanks for theref man i appreciate the brutal honesty, i might throw this model out and start a new atv

07-06-2008, 05:16 PM	#885 (permalink)
bitmap Freelancer 129 - 11	lol this is the internet, its easy to start fights. but if i wanted to sound harsh i would just criticize without giving good points, when in fact i pointed out some stuff that in my opinion he should check out. but as i said, this is the internet, so take it with a grain of salt.

07-06-2008, 05:20 PM	#886 (permalink)
ae. Level Artist 569 - 14	nah man that was a good crit i really thank you for it, i actually started a new atv i figured out my problem with the last one i used too many ref from sport and military atvs so it was a mash up and was hard to give a feel of it, im going to start a new one but its not going to be a military one its going to be a sports version.

07-07-2008, 01:57 AM	#887 (permalink)
ae. Level Artist 569 - 14	heres an update still need to add the drive chain thingy to the back wheel also those wheels are temp so i could get a look at the size:

07-07-2008, 05:07 AM	#889 (permalink)
bitmap Freelancer 129 - 11	now we're talking! keep it up

07-07-2008, 05:11 AM	#890 (permalink)
ae. Level Artist 569 - 14	hey can you guys help me fine a good pick of the chasis of an atv and engine i cant seem to find any good ref ill look harder.