Naklajat.com (portfolio of naklajat!)

Naklajat · 05-13-2008, 08:05 AM

Naklajat.com :: Portfolio of Art and Design

Let me know what you think! Or flog me for having a blank welcome page and no CV!

Talon · 05-13-2008, 08:29 AM

Uh... you've got two menus, one of which doesn't work. Pick one and go with it

6 distinct text styles in the first 300px of your site... that looks messy. Again, pick one (or two, tops) and go with it. If you're going for the handwritten style, it might be worth making the brush extremely hard and ensuring you write larger, leaving more white space in the letters; it's a little hard to read just now and it's bordering on more messy than stylish (meaning I just glanced over it completely without reading it).

You already seem to know you've got a blank home page and no CV... so get those sorted.

Your bio page could use a little better spacing. Just now the text is massive... Tahoma isn't really a recommended font to use (You've specified Helvetica as the primary font, but unless the user has Helvetica installed - and 95% of windows users won't because it's a liscenced font, it's only pre-installed on Macs - they won't be able to see the site in helvetica). Arial or Verdana will give much more readable results.

The thumbnails on your 3d page would look better if they were equally sized and uniformly displayed. At least add stats, wires and texture flats with your bridge prop.

"Content & site design © 2008 Mark McCormack (mmccormack1 [at] gmail [dot] com)" isn't particularly neccessary. Just a little "© 2008 Mark McCormack" at the bottom of each page, out of the way, is a better approach.

A lot of crits, but I'm guessing it's very early days for your site.

loke.be · 05-13-2008, 09:05 AM

I rejoin Talon about the fact that the site looks completely messy.. mix of styles, not so clean presentation.. good advices from Talon.

CounterSeal · 05-18-2008, 12:02 AM

One thing I find weird is how the greeting (first) page only has content at the top, like a banner. For a second, I thought the page stopped loading or something... you might want to add some featured works, or even a short introduction of yourself on the main page.

AdamtehGreat · 05-18-2008, 05:49 AM

Yep, all of these points are valid. The sketchy style is very hard to pull off. I know I've tried it a couple of times before... and... well.. didn't keep it

Page should be flattened too. Read Jon Jones's article and keep at it!

05-13-2008, 08:05 AM	#1 (permalink)
Naklajat University Student 39 - 0	Naklajat.com (portfolio of naklajat!) Naklajat.com :: Portfolio of Art and Design Let me know what you think! Or flog me for having a blank welcome page and no CV!

05-13-2008, 08:29 AM	#2 (permalink)
Talon Game-Artist.net Staff 2,654 - 449	Uh... you've got two menus, one of which doesn't work. Pick one and go with it 6 distinct text styles in the first 300px of your site... that looks messy. Again, pick one (or two, tops) and go with it. If you're going for the handwritten style, it might be worth making the brush extremely hard and ensuring you write larger, leaving more white space in the letters; it's a little hard to read just now and it's bordering on more messy than stylish (meaning I just glanced over it completely without reading it). You already seem to know you've got a blank home page and no CV... so get those sorted. Your bio page could use a little better spacing. Just now the text is massive... Tahoma isn't really a recommended font to use (You've specified Helvetica as the primary font, but unless the user has Helvetica installed - and 95% of windows users won't because it's a liscenced font, it's only pre-installed on Macs - they won't be able to see the site in helvetica). Arial or Verdana will give much more readable results. The thumbnails on your 3d page would look better if they were equally sized and uniformly displayed. At least add stats, wires and texture flats with your bridge prop. "Content & site design © 2008 Mark McCormack (mmccormack1 [at] gmail [dot] com)" isn't particularly neccessary. Just a little "© 2008 Mark McCormack" at the bottom of each page, out of the way, is a better approach. A lot of crits, but I'm guessing it's very early days for your site. __________________ > My Portfolio > Hull-Breach Lead Modeler > Supporter of good crits.

05-13-2008, 09:05 AM	#3 (permalink)
loke.be New Artist 8 - 0	I rejoin Talon about the fact that the site looks completely messy.. mix of styles, not so clean presentation.. good advices from Talon. __________________ My folioblog Webgalleries : http://www.loke.be

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05-18-2008, 12:02 AM	#4 (permalink)
CounterSeal New Artist 22 - 2	One thing I find weird is how the greeting (first) page only has content at the top, like a banner. For a second, I thought the page stopped loading or something... you might want to add some featured works, or even a short introduction of yourself on the main page.

05-18-2008, 05:49 AM	#5 (permalink)
AdamtehGreat New Artist 26 - 2	Yep, all of these points are valid. The sketchy style is very hard to pull off. I know I've tried it a couple of times before... and... well.. didn't keep it Page should be flattened too. Read Jon Jones's article and keep at it!