So far I'm really liking the feel of it, I think it would look even better if you made it a tad darker light wise though.
You have a nice collection of good looking models, but the scene still feels a little empty, I've always paired "messy and cramped" with industrial, so it could be a little more "busy" model wise.
I'm not sure what you will be adding as clutter, but maybe adding some more factory related structures to the emptier areas, like a fusebox, cable spool and the like would help make it stand out more. Make it look as busy as industrial sites tend to look.
And as mentioned by BJA:too many red lights. You could limit them to certain spots and maybe use a balanced combination of yellow and white? (depending on the placement of the light of course).
Also I'd model the wires for the lights, it gives you more control and opts for interesting twists and wire placement
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With all that said this is a very good scene you have set up, and you have every right to be proud of it, can't wait to see it fully textured and put in CryEngine 2
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